Nice tune you have here. You need to work on your transitions and arrangement (building tension and release), the track feels like it has the same level of energy at all times. Not great when you want emphasis on the chorus perhaps. It's like writing a story. Try out filter sweeps, riser/downlift SFX and reverb/delay automation.
You should work on your mix too. Cut frequencies you don't really need and make sure the master peaks no higher than 0db. Then during the master stage you can increase the gain on your master to make it louder.
Nice tune, but still room for improvement. Good job!